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In the brightest darkness
In my deepest sorrow

I finally see what is wrong with me
I can't get over her
You can see how I feel

All these memories
That keep haunting me

Of a paper heart cut into pieces
By the scissors it fell for
He cannot forget her

When these days come and go
I'll remember what seems to be not to long ago

And as weeks fly by
These scars won't escape my eye

I'll tape myself back together
I'll fall apart when I walk past her

And I still hold these piece in my arms
The torn up shreds of my paper heart
The pieces that keep falling apart

I still wonder what happened to us
Was it something I've done? Was it something she said?

I can't keep putting the pieces together
I'm falling apart each time I think about her

And my paper heart is crumpled up
This paper heart is cut up and torn up
And no tape, no glue, will make it whole again

And still I hold these pieces in my arms
Waiting to see what you can do to fix me
Waiting to see if things will go back to how they used to be
This is a poem I improvised, I really like it, actually. It's got the concept I wanted to portray and I think I did a pretty good job with it. Anyways, I hope you enjoy and let me know what you think! This is one of those poems I tried to rhyme.
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musicaddict96 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2010
i really llike this poem.
i can actually see whats going on through this poem in my head.
^W^ :clap: very great job! i really feel like drawing something because of it, and maybe i will/
but who knows, i procrastinate.
but maybe!
its still really good! :D keep up the great work! :meow:
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)
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musicaddict96 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2010
no problem! :D It was awesome! :D
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks again! :D
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musicaddict96 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2010
no problem! :D again! :XD:
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WoofCurse Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2010
Very well written.
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you =)
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JSteinman Featured By Owner May 30, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You've done it again! Wonderfully written :D
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner May 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Why thank you! =) And I appreciate the fave! =)
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JSteinman Featured By Owner May 31, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
'twas me pleasure :bow:
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner May 31, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
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Ruthina Featured By Owner May 27, 2010
well, you could like
get another paper
heart and stick
the pieces on to
it like a puzzle.
in other words
find someone else
i think. sorry dont
realy know your
situation but im
sure therel be someone
else out there for you.
wait, unless your already
over her and found someone
else, or um something. btw
love it so cool.
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner May 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, why yes, that does sound logical, no? But to be quite honest, I don't even fully understand my situation. I'd try to get over her at times, for her sake...but it's just not possible. As for finding somebody else, I can't see who else I'd even like. But hey, thanks, 'glad you enjoyed it =)
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Ruthina Featured By Owner May 28, 2010
omg
my mate, Ezz(ex bestie), she wentout with this boyy his name was Ethan, they broke up. and he got rly upset. then she went out with the boyy his name is Samm i had a crush on for atlest six months. so i was greiving then i went out with Ethan for some reason. i fell totaly infactuated with him. then another mate, Liv (Ezzes bestie(she also stole my place)she was going out with this guy, Trevor (my best guy mate ever) for bout 8-9 months he dumped her because he was loseing his feelings for her because she was constantly ditching him to hang out with Ezz, it just so happend id introuduced him to my best chick mate ever EllieBells, and he started to rly like her (also part of the reason he broke up with Liv) so within the next week he was going out with her, as you can guess Liv was pretty upset and was greiving and to find out that he was already going out with some one new, jsut pushed her over the edge, she was cutting and hateing on EllieBells for haveing the thing she wanted most she also hated me because i was the one who introduced them. then Ethan (who was still my bf at this time) dumped me and stoped talking to me. :( any way then what happend Ezz, Liv and Ethan all banded together excluding me and Trevor(this is how we became besties). we used to be one big group you see. btw there are other ppls but adding them makes it too complacated. so the next thing that happend (im pretty sure) that Ezz cheated on Samm with Tom who is Samms bestie. you can guess Samm and Tom fell out, Ezz and Samm broke up and Samm got up set andstarted cuting. Ezz also got depresed but she isnt in to that whole cutting thing so she took it out on random pples like me, so then she stared hateing me. thats when our friendship REALY turned to shit. then Ethan and Live went out because Ethan was pretty much inlove with her. but it didnt last long because every time she kissed him she thort of Trevor so she dumped him, he got all up set. and since he wasnt talking to me i couldnt comfort him. though ive now convinced Liv that she shouldnt hate me enough that i can comfort her and Ezz which is good. whats happening now is that he loves her and still wants to go out with her her likes him, DOESNT want to go out with him but will do stuff with him any way. Ezz doesnt like that because she knows how bad it feels to be used (from Tom that is)so is againsed the whole idea because she doesnt want to choose between them when it goes badly because it will. she loves Tom( i think) and likes Samm, Samm loves her and wants to get back together with her but she doesnt wannt to hurt him( or so she tells me)im left feeling rly crappy because ive lost lots of friends in the past two months or something because of all this shit i started cutting i didnt even realy know it either. it was like yeah i made a cut on my leg it felt good but i dont cut. till i realised i realy DO cut. my lif is so damn COMPLACATED!!! im sure your situation isnt as fucked up as this even though you arnt quite sure of it. morel: DONT DATE INSIDE THE GROUP!!!! so well ive told you my story even though you may not had even read it all, but i told you it because them maybe either your propblem might not seem so confusing and then there was i pert where i want to get to know bout your problem, could you please tell me? you dont have to though if you dont feel comfortable but i hear its easier to tell a stranger.
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner May 29, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Well, I did read the entire story, when somebody comments, I get to it, read it, and comment with all honesty and empathy.

I can't say my previous situation was less complicated than this. I can only say it involved less people. I agree that it is easier to tell a stranger, so I will tell you mine.

Just last year, I still remember the exact day...January 5th, it was. I got into my first relationship. I knew this girl for a while before this, and I thought we'd just be friends because I don't think much of myself, so I mean, who'd ever wanna go out with me? But this girl was really in love with me. I was shocked, I was surprised, I was delighted. And I said yes. I'll skip all the lovey dovey crap, the kissing, the talking, the times I poured my heart out, and all. We were together for 10 months. And I was the one who ended it with her. And it was a terrible break up. Apparently, she fell in love with one of my best friends MONTHS before...MONTHS. I was infuriated. And when she finally told me about all the times she went over to his house, went on dates with him and all...she even went as far as telling me I had no right to be angry because SHE had the RIGHT to do WHATEVER she wanted...I was seriously pissed. When she told me that, I was extremely angry, but I had a tear in my eye. I looked to the ground, and when I finally looked up, I didn't see love or affection in her eyes. I told her these exact words: If I cannot be your first place, I don't wanna be second place. If I've just been your shoulder to cry on all this time, then you should've broken my heart earlier. Now, get the fuck out of my sight. And I never talked to her again, never saw her again.

I didn't want to see any other girl for a long time. It was my first relationship, I gave it my all, I gave her anything she asked for, I did whatever she wanted me to. After breaking up with her, I began cutting again (yes, I started cutting a long, long time ago), and I cut myself. A lot. And I loved it. To this day, the lines are still there and they remind me of the adversities and the pain.

Then I stopped cutting myself. It was bad, and I stopped. Months later, I met this girl. Gosh, she was the most adorable girl. Her eyes were had this intelligent and curious-ness to it. I talked to her a lot and I eventually told her I liked her and we started going out. Those were the happiest times of my life...but time didn't give us justice...the relationship didn't last long. She broke up with me, but she had her reasons, and I respected them. And we still talked at times, I gave her her space, and we remained friends. But lately, she's just sorta...stopped talking to me. And...I dunno...I don't know how to feel.

I appreciate being able to talk to you. I hope things turn out alright for you, I really do. And maybe you can see what's happened to me as well.
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Ruthina Featured By Owner May 30, 2010
wow, that first girl needs to sort it out aye you do have a right. you have a right to be murderous. well i would have been. i too, also remeber the date of when i went ou with Ethan, it was on the 7th of march (sunday i think it was, well it was the week end) at 12 13- 12 14 am, keep in mind this is pretty much night time. i guess he was a bit sleep deprived lol that why he probly went out with me not to mention the part where i was a bord and horny person and made HIM horny too. so my fult rly ne hu and he dumped me 2nd of april at 3 14 lik after school on a friday by text, saying ' oy bithch, its Ethan your being ratchit to me i think we should break up. bye' off some one elses phone too i might add so i couldnt text him back. he was my first too,and my first kiss i got was behind B block at school in the morning some time think it was march 9th or somthing. cant blieve my frst ever kiss on the lips was touges. strait up. he was just like bam. any way. same i dont think much of my self either i was also fridgit up till then, so it was like im ugly and fridgit now hu wants a girl like that? thats me miss shallow. im not rli like that, i wasnt like nope im not having no boyys. i was pretty much the day after flirting with every one who talked to me because it was like im off the rebound, im lonly and i just dont give a shit any more. and he didnt get all that he wanted either. he wanted me to give im a hj, bj and he wanted to poke me take my virginity ect. you know, i was just like hang on buddy. no way. so not ready. ive cut 4 times i think, once along the calf muscle in the creace type thing that runs up the leg from that fail bone that sticks out of ya ancle. then again just above my nee, then (dont juge me) just above my bra line (i dont know what i was thinking either lol) and lastly two or so days ago on my wrist (finaly some where normal) and Samm got upset when he found out. i was annoyd with my self. what is bad is the whole after realationship thing because things get awkward and they dont want to see you, i broke down a cuppl of times at school. so not a good idea. i think yours does sound less complacated. you dont have every one going out then moving on then breaking up and going after the same ppl. mann every ones too young to be in these situation because it seems asthough we cant handle the pain, OR the pleasur that comes with it all
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner May 30, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, she was pretty much a bitch...I still hate her guts. Yeah, I remember when my first kissed my first girlfriend...yeah, it was tongues too. geez...i'm not into the whole pre-marital sex stuff. i refrain from stuff like that, 'don't wanna get sexually involved until after marriage. i mean, i'm all for making out and all, but that's about it. i don't get all flirtatious after breakin up, i'm a lot more mellow and cynical. i've cut too many times to remember. i have these really long, deep cuts on my calf. some on my legs and thighs. i cut my shouders, my chest, but mainly my arms and wrists. haha, i'm not a judgmental person, i only ask that you don't judge me either, haha. yeah, i hate the whole "aftermath" ordeal...i wrote a poem about that. yeah, the thing is, i am mature enough, but the people i end up with aren't...bleeh. i'm into the whole love and such, and they just get scared off or somethin.
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Ruthina Featured By Owner May 31, 2010
i dont want to do it either i dont think, but ppl says it feels good so im not sure yet its just the whole reveiling my whole body to some one else. . . well im not exactly confidant in my body image, ppl say i should be but i just cant see the "hot" part of my self im all bleugh. and the marriagey thingy idk i bet il get drunk first time and lose my self contorl or some thing aye lol. and how would you cut your sholder? its just like, DIIIISloctate your arm. i wont judge you. though in person i tend to, with photos i tend to.but when some one writes or somehing i dont find i can lol. i have become more confidant with guys though. like, now im not scared if a lead a guy on because you know what? means i have a selection. sounds ratty but im sick of being scared and stuff. i always write my stuff on REALY emotions i cant rli do it ne other way. i just have to pretend m that person. or in pretty much all cases just take what im feeling and throw it on the page. im a freak im loud im flirty and the ppl i DO get are always the horny ones. well that is if they get close enough.
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner May 31, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
It did feel good, but I've stopped. And I don't wanna go back to it ever again. Haha, that's another thing, I've got this pretty good self-control. Here in the US, 'can't drink until 21. But, since I'm really Canadian, I can drink when I'm 18. I intend on going back to Canada and drink a bit. But not enough to get drunk, that's not me. Aye, that's totally not me =P I'm pretty innocent and I try not to get into stuff like that. I mean, I do flirt and talk to girls, but I never lead them on. I try to get buddy-buddy and all, y'know? But that's really about it.
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Ruthina Featured By Owner May 27, 2010
like find some
one whol be
your suport and
like keep you
together.
and such
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Gekiganfan Featured By Owner May 25, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
the flow is wonderful and catches the reader early on.
Description and the story is easy to follow.
Very heart touching.
WEll done!
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner May 25, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you =) I really appreciate your praise and evaluation of my poem!
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MelodiousPoet Featured By Owner May 23, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
This fits me pretty well actually. Everytime I start picking up the pieces of my heart and start taping them back together, scissors comes along and cuts it into shreds once more. >_< Its so frustrating. But I really like how you conveyed the feelings and the concept, its really well written.
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner May 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you =) It's always neat to meet somebody who can relate to a poem you've just written. And I'm glad you were able to relate and enjoy the poem. I apprecaite the fave =) Thank you.
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MelodiousPoet Featured By Owner May 23, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Yea, I know what you mean :)
Your welcome :)
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bookworm012496 Featured By Owner May 22, 2010  Student Writer
My paper heart has been torn to shreds and glued together too many times. The pieces are crumbling are will soon disenigrate . . . I want to feel whole again.
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner May 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:clap: Well said, my friend =)
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bookworm012496 Featured By Owner May 22, 2010  Student Writer
thankyou!!!! It's nice to find someone who understands, friends are great but they didn't go throught it. I love them but we've had . . . different relationship expirences.
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner May 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, I completely understand, I've been in multiple situations where it was great to have a friend to support me, but they didn't experience things the way I did.
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bookworm012496 Featured By Owner May 23, 2010  Student Writer
Exactly!!! and well, thank you.
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner May 23, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome =)
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bookworm012496 Featured By Owner May 23, 2010  Student Writer
:) :glomp: lolz
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